Well-written advice helps more.

Just found this advice on time management. How would you improve it?

“If you’re easily distracted and nothing seems to be working to stop that, try removing the distractions totally. If you keep playing video games, go somewhere without internet access or a TV. If you keep getting distracted by the kids, work while they’re at school or when someone else is there to take care of them. The whole point is that not having distractions is much easier than ignoring them.”

Sigh. Good ideas. Poor writing.

Pivotal Writing Tips:
Each of these sentences has extra words that weigh down the reader’s experience. Trimming excess words will keep your reader focused and engaged.

Let’s look at each sentence individually. Which words can go without altering the sentence’s message?

Before: “If you’re easily distracted and nothing seems to be working to stop that, try removing the distractions totally.”
After: If you can’t seem to ignore your distractions, remove them completely.

Before: “If you keep playing video games, go somewhere without internet access or a TV.”
After: Addicted to video games? Avoid the internet and the TV.

Before: “If you keep getting distracted by the kids, work while they’re at school or when someone else is there to take care of them.
After: Can’t work with the kids around? Wait ’til they’re at school or under someone else’s care.

Before: “The whole point is that not having distractions is much easier than ignoring them.”
After: My main point: eliminating distractions is easier than ignoring them.

The phrase “not having distractions” makes that last sentence especially cumbersome. Instead of ‘not having’, let’s smooth out the sentence by using a single verb.

Now, let’s put it all back together…
“If you can’t seem to ignore your distractions, remove them completely. Addicted to video games? Avoid the internet and the TV. Can’t work with the kids around? Wait ’til they’re at school or under someone else’s care. My main point: eliminating distractions is easier than ignoring them.”

Mmm… Good advice…
Well, it’s time for me to get back to my Tetris-Thursday marathon!